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Re: Jacks sign 2
look like two really good players and leaders. Good for the Jacks.Originally posted by LakeJack View Post -
Re: Jacks sign 2
The news is good but the first two sentences in the story...wow! Was someone in the sports info department trying to set a record for redundancy?
From GoJacks.com:
The South Dakota State softball team signed a pair of players to National Letters of Intent on Monday, as Devan Larsen and Lauren Hamilton both signed letters indicating their plans to enroll at South Dakota State and play for the Jackrabbit softball team.
The two signees include Devan Larsen from Monroe, Wash., and Lauren Hamilton from Higginsville, MO.
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How about something like the following:
Devan Larsen, Monroe, WA, and Lauren Hamilton, Higginsville, MO, signed National Letters of Intent Monday to play softball for South Dakota State University.
What about consistency on how the SID identifies the athlete's home state: Wash. or WA? In the same sentence, a four-letter abbreviation is used for one state and the two-letter postal abbreviation is used for the other state.
Who wrote that story? Who let it get out the door with no editing? If the writer 'fesses up in a private message, I'll send him a copy of "Elements of Style" by Strunk and White.
JackJD, resident curmudgeon.
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